Did you ever notice that unless something smells especially
good or particularly offensive, we tend to ignore it?
Because our sense of sight and hearing are dominant we tend
to ignore every day smells. We see the
trees, hear the traffic, and look into each other’s eyes as we speak.
But we take our other senses, touch, taste, and smell for
granted. We often ignore them. Oh sure,
we feel, taste and smell, but not with a lot of awareness. While the smell of
bacon makes our mouth water, and we may say it smells good, or that it’s making
us hungry, we don’t elaborate on it. On the other hand if we smell something
offensive, say a
skunk, we go on and on about the distasteful odor. Same thing with taste.The bacon and egg tastes good, and we enjoy them, but we expect to enjoy them so we don’t say much about them. On the
other hand, the sour taste of vinegar or a lemon has us spitting and complaining about the acrid flavor.
The same applies to our sense of touch. We feel something
soft or silky, it’s comforting, and we might make an off-handed remark. But, if
we burn, cut, or hurt ourselves, we complain and make a big deal about the
pain.
But in writing all of these senses are as important as sight
and sound. We describe the setting, the
background. But by using all of our senses we bring our stories to life. We can
go from the real world to a new world of make believe. But we also need to make
our story realistic. In both fiction and nonfiction, a richly described setting
will pull your readers out of the real world of pressure and tension and into
your world of make believe. So we can’t ignore these senses in our
descriptions?
We need to become more aware of these senses in our everyday
world? Go outside, look around you -
listen to the sounds. Close your eyes.
Inhale deeply, breath in the odors. What do you smell? The flowers,
exhausts from cars, it depends where you are. You can do the same wherever you
go. Walk into a department store at a mall.
Inhale the scents. What do you smell, the lingering scent of someone’s
perfume or the perfume counter, if a smoker walks past you, you detect the odor
of cigarette smoke. At a movie it will probably be the smell of popcorn. Restaurants have many smells, garlic, onions,
rich sauces or maybe coffee. Remember these smells. Use them in your writing.
Next time you eat, savor the food. Hold it in your mouth,
relish the experience and texture of bread and the slight aroma of yeast. Feel the surface of the tabletop or
tablecloth. Ingrain them into your
memory.
Use these senses in the story. Let your reader hear, see,
feel, smell and taste the story. The story and characters will come alive
through these senses. It’s not enough to tell us what something looks like.
SHOW US!! We want to feel it, smell it, and maybe even taste it. Readers won’t
notice that you included them, but they will notice if you omit them. Without
them, your world will be flat, boring, and unrealistic.
No, you don’t have to
add them to every sentence or even every scene. Maybe your characters are in a
situation where they don’t notice smells or textures and there’s nothing to
taste. That’s often true of tense scenes. If someone is attacking you, you
certainly aren’t going to notice the sweet smell of roses. On the other hand
you might notice the offensive odor of his sweat. And you’ll certainly feel the
beads of perspiration on your own forehead or the taste the nausea building up
from your throat to your mouth.
Other times we might be deep in thought and won’t even
notice our surroundings. That’s fine, but make sure to include them when they
are needed. If your characters walk into a restaurant, we want to know what
they smell as well as what they see and hear. Too often, as beginners these
senses are ignored.
Remember also, that some odors will smell different to
different people. Some smells are
“Universal”. Dog poop and the smell of
garbage are offensive to everyone. Flowers, freshly cut grass or fresh baked bread
usually evoke memories. We can all picture
a garden, or remember the first spring mowing and of course Mom or Grandma in
the kitchen baking. Use these scenes to help show us the scene or bring out an
emotion of our characters. Some smells
scents are less universal. Cauliflower will smell differently to me than you.
If the reader loves it and you hate it, the scene will be all wrong. What you
want to make sound delicious might make your reader go yuck and you’ll have
lost the realism. Stick to the universal smells.
Pick up your favorite novel. Go through it page by page.
Highlight the senses with different colors. What an amazing array of colors on
the pages. No, you might not see all the colors on every page, but enough to
make it colorful.
So how do we use these senses in our scenes?
Imagine your character on a beach by the ocean. Put yourself
there. Close your eyes. Picture it. What do you hear? Are the seagulls squawking, children playing?
Can you hear the swish of the waves? Let’s take it further. Inhale, take a deep
breath. What do you
smell, the fresh air, salty water? How does your skin feel? Can you feel the wet
spray from the waves? Can you taste the salty ocean? Wiggle your toes in the
gritty sand. Is it hot, does it burn your feet? Are the waves coming on shore
and flowing over your feet? Can you squish your toes in the wet sand?
How much stronger your words will be describing these
feelings and tastes as well as the sights and sounds through your characters.
Your story and characters will become more alive.
The senses are as important to non-fiction, as they are
critical to fiction.
If you’re writing a how to article about baking bread, the
reader needs to know that they should knead the dough until it blisters for a
better, lighter loaf, and that it should be smooth to the touch. No the smell
of the yeast is not important. Some
things are not important in non-fiction, but if you are writing a nostalgic
piece about the memory of Mom or Grandma baking in the kitchen, add those
senses. They’re an integral part of the article.
Start today, right now - observe these senses in everyday
life. Pay particular attention to the feel, smell, and taste. Sometimes you can
taste something just from the odor. Have you ever experienced a particularly
bad odor? It smelled so bad you could
almost taste it.
Remember these
senses. Concentrate on the feel of the smoothness of a baby’s skin or the
texture of your sheets, vegetables, everything you touch. Make a mental note of
these feelings. Use them in your stories. Make your characters real to the
reader and enjoy the senses that we take so for granted.
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