Set Up: Planning to leave the orphanage, Hattie stands with a valise in hand and surveys the room filled with sleeping children. Her heart's heavy, but as the oldest orphan there, it's time for her to begin new memories.
Here's my six from the opening chapter:
She [Hattie] had no
recollection of life before coming to the orphanage and very few pleasant
memories. The meager belongings she’d packed consisted of a second gray smock
identical to the one she wore, another pair of stockings, well-worn pantalets, and a
chemise yellowed with age. The only shoes she owned were on her feet. She
stared down at the scuffed toes and sighed. The paper thin soles provided
little protection, and she’d mended one of the laces by knotting the break. Would
she ever own a pair that hadn’t been worn by someone else?
Thanks for coming by, and I hope you'll be back with encouragement to forge on with Hattie's journey and what lies ahead for her.
A great word picture of Hattie. We can see her and also feel what she's feeling. Great six!
ReplyDeleteVery strong and very visual. Great six.
ReplyDeletepowerful! Love it. I more, please.
ReplyDeletewhat period is this? time to make new memories - nice - poor thing I feel for her
ReplyDeleteReally gets us into her POV. Don't you love/hate it when a story goes somewhere you didn't intend at all?
ReplyDeletePoor Hattie - glad to hear it's a time travel and she can get away from this life! Great six.
ReplyDeleteMaybe Hattie will do better when she time travels. You painted a compelling picture of her.
ReplyDeleteGreat six.
ReplyDeleteWonderful imagery, l can see her standing there, bless her!
ReplyDeleteI hope things pick up for her. This made me sad.
ReplyDeleteAw, great snippet. My stories end up incorporating time travel, too. :-)
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